Sunday, December 18, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday (December 18)



Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday!  Hard to believe that next week it'll be Christmas already, but there you have it--2012 is done, ladies and gents.

This excerpt is from Chapter 8 of Restoring Experience, one of my current WIPs.  I promised you'd meet Dan, Alexia's boyfriend of seven years (yikes!) and... here he is.

“Come walk with me,” he said, shut the door behind him.
I tried not to fidget as I watched him come around to my side.  It was so stupid, having to wait inside the car for him to get the door for me, but all the men I knew insisted, and the hurt on their faces whenever I did it myself generated enough guilt to make me desist.   
I didn’t mind when he held a door open for me, or when he pulled out a chair for me at a restaurant--I liked it--but when it came to the car it made me fidget.  I felt helpless, locked in.  None of the other girls seemed to mind, and it never looked awkward with them--just with me.

Thank you so much for your visit, and triple thanks for your comments and feedback--they make my day, every time.  Plus, I really want to know what impression you got of Dan so far.

Have a fantastic Sunday, y'all, and remember to visit the other Six Sundayers--one day you'll see a new bestseller at your local bookstore and say, "Hey! I read a piece of that online, when it was just a work-in-progress, at Six Sentence Sunday!"

P.S.--I'm celebrating this weekend because a short story of mine was published Friday at Fiction365.  If you're in the mood for a creepy story about legends that won't stay *just* legends, take a hop over and read it here.  I'd love to hear what you think about that one too!

20 comments :

  1. Gosh, what that poor girl is going through is so hard! I bet Dan is the 'perfect' boyfriend, hence all the guilt...

    Congrats on the short, girlie! XOXO

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  2. Thanks, Zee! Yeah, I think Alexia's guilt is starting to build up :) Thanks for stopping by--off to read yours now :D

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  3. I disagree with Zee which isn't often - in a relationship for seven years - and ? I have the impression he is boring - and boring is the worst insult I can hurl at a person. Every girl (and boy) needs excitement at least some of the time. Happy Holidays to you !

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  4. Hahahaha... Sue, I understand--it's not easy to disagree with Zee :) But I think Alexia would definitely agree with you on this one: seven years is a long time, and even though Alexia's been taught to shun excitement--she lost her father some years ago and she's still recovering from all the upheaval that caused--I think right now she's about to face a question most of us do sooner or later (or all the time): does she do what she's *supposed* to do, or what she *wants* to do?

    Thanks for the visit!

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  5. Oh, I empathize completely. I can get my own darn car door! Great six, Guilie. :)

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  6. Thanks, Siobhan! Yeah, those car door issues :D Thanks for dropping in--next time stay for a cuppa ;)

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  7. Sounds like Alexia has a problem asserting herself? I'd love to read more to see how/if she figures it out!

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  8. All kinds of awkward, as Our Heroine plays the role of someone she isn't. Nicely done six.

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  9. Congratulations on your short story publication! I liked this week's six. Interesting insight into the heroine.

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  10. Yes, congrats on the publication of your short. And yes, the insight into the heroine is intriguing--also that's exactly how I feel about the car door thing, so I related 100%.

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  11. Thank you! For the visit, for the comment, and for the congratulations :) @Sarah, yes--I do hope Alexia figures out how to make a stand. @EP--that's a great way to put it! @JC & @Gem, glad you noticed the insight to Alexia's character--it's so hard to do when it's just six sentences, hehe.

    Happy Sunday, girls!

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  12. Nice piece of narration - I can totally understand why she feels that way, and the guys are jerks for insisting on chivalry when it doesn't make her feel safe. Thanks for taking part!

    I missed the list deadline for this week, but I did get six sentences up! http://kelworthfiles.wordpress.com/2011/12/18/six-sentence-sunday-more-from-children/

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  13. It's nice to read a woman's POV on this little tradition for a change. Thanks for exploding a myth for me.

    Good style, too. Nicely done. You obviously know what you're doing.

    And congrats on the publication!

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  14. Beautiful, tension filled post. I'm wondering why Dan makes her feel this way in particular. Or is she just tired of him?

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  15. Ah, Mr. Kelworth and Scott! So nice to see you here--thanks for providing some testosterone to balance the estrogen flooding the page :D

    Listen: before this chivalry thing gets out of hand, let me clarify--I love a gentleman. I'm Mexican (like Alexia), and I was raised to expect certain things, to find caring and attention in little details. But the car thing... I know many women that love it, take offense when it's not done, so please don't stop doing it :) For me, though, like Alexia, it's an awkward moment. I feel helpless.

    Now, Mr. Kelworth, about the guys being jerks... I'm sure Alexia appreciates the sympathy, but it's a cultural thing. The guys were taught they'd be jerks if they *didn't* do it, so... it's a tough call.

    Thanks for stopping by, and for the comments :) Made my day!

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  16. Congrats on your publication. Heck, I'd open the door. I don't mind chivalry, but I don't like being made to feel awkward.

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  17. Nice six. I was with a guy once who insisted on opening and closing the door for me. I remember that hurt look when I would forget and do it myself.

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  18. I want my husband to get my door, probably now more than when I was dating. All day I'm sticking kids in cars and loading groceries etc. So, if I go out with my husband even just to the hardware store, I want him to get the car door for me. It reminds me I'm special to him.

    Nice little piece. I like the characters. :)

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  19. Interesting that it's only with car doors...really raises questions regarding her character arc. Nice work and great six!

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